Success criteria for camp writting

Descriptive vocabulary (words that help to SHOW the reader) use a range of verbs use a variety of adverbs Language features (phrases that help paint a picture) select 2 - 3 similes select 2 - 3 metaphors or personification choose onomatopoeia to show sounds (crash!) select words that start with the same sound (alliteration) Sentences use short sentences to create suspense Structure use 3 - 5 paragraphs.

I think I need a heap more practice with language features all of them aspecialy personification .i did really well at using expression

Walt:entertain 

Abseling

Time has come. As I climb up the ladders I'm saying to my self  how dose she do this for a job climbing up the ladders all day.                                                                                                                                                                                                                     

 As I got to the top ants said have a seat. as she lets someone climb down and then sore a hand poke up from the side wait there.    she said as she hive fives a hand. and she asked me what rope I want to you,s  I said hmmm she pushed me to do the black rope it was the best

day 2 of writting 

It was the best because you 

 can  control your speed. she said  just stand on the other side of the bar i said  now.  she said yes okay she said  I'll clip you. on click now she said remember this holds an elephant. she told me don't bounce on the rubber ok. I started walking down . and then I started bouncing because I was off the rubber. then I Heard the  wall saying STOP KICKING ME i said shhh I'm trying  to climb down a wall here. as I hit the ground the first thing I said was it was simple. jokes it's pretty scary and tall .after me was Sophie mostly everyone in my group cheered Sophie

 on including me As my hands slowly stop shaking .

The End   

     

Group presentation

Camp Presentation

WALT: present 

Success Criteria:

Know your stuff 

Loud clear voice

Share the main points

Make eye contact

Make sure every member participates

http://youtu.be/lS57Pk1LbAE

Presentation 

Task: Find out about air rifle's,

Reflection: I think I could talk louder

My goals for camp

My goal is to over come my fears about earth boarding base cause if you fall off I'm pretty shore it hearts . My goal is not be afraid of wetas on falling on my head but I think you have a helmet I think so but still watch out . 

Walt:setsmart goals

Swimming sport 4

Next time I should maybe include more people not in kiwi because I don't care if kiwi doesn't win we all tried are best .

Swimming sports 3

I showed kotahitanga by  picking up my rubbish and maybe a couple alse 

Swimming sports 2

 

When it was my time to get up and go to the starting line for freestyle I was shaking so hard I nearly. Feel in but I lined up waiting for my name to get called out . I  dived In I was fine when I was swimming but I saw the flag when I was breathing I sore it get really shallow I pull my head out of the water and touched wall I saw every one cheering I jumped out  and I saw someone that  I raced I said Hi five nice race better luck next time .

Swimming sport 1

I was proud that I got in to the relay because I never have.